Walt: write a powerful introduction
Purpose: to entertain and share on blog
Success criteria:
- Use “W” words
- describe character/characters
Introduction: As the sun went down dark purple clouds started to appear roughly into the sky. Mariana a high school teacher had her favorite PJ's on with her pink socks with a little heart shape on the bottom. While she was at home a disturbing sound echoed into her room, as she questioned what that sound could be Mariana kept on hearing that same sound over and over again.
Mariana became fed up with that sound, so she opened her door to find a bunch of boys bullying a very young girl for some of her money. But to think it was boys from her class. Mariana marched right to them and growled out “Mark,you and your friends should know better. I will be speaking with all your parents”. Mark’s friends looked at mark and said “Bye”, the two boys ran off leaving Mark all alone.
So after a while Mariana spoke to Mark and asked him why he had chosen to hang out with those boys……….Mark cried out that in his old school he used to get bullied. That's why he wanted to be a bully because he was afraid that he would once again be the one that gets bullied. Mariana told him that true friends wouldnt leave you like what those boys done. Also that if you get bullied try to tell someone so that they can help you,it's what adults and friends are for.
Conclusion: Mariana finally got his attention but then lost it again. Mark was face down staring at his shoes. Mariana knew that he was still hurting from the unerasable things he had done. After a while Mark was happy and he had a new group of friends that lead him into the right direction.
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